Let’s Talk About POV and Deep POV

I have been an avid reader ever since I was able to read, as early as the Dick and Jane readers.  I have read many books in my life so far and hope to read many more.  I have read books that were fantastic, some that were just good, some that were mediocre and some that were quite bad.  Many of the books I have read were written in POV, but not Deep POV.  I don’t believe that made them bad books.  On the contrary, some of them were wonderful classic stories.

So, what are POV and Deep POV?  POV is the abbreviation of Point of View which is defined, by Merriam Webster, as a position or perspective from which something is considered or evaluated; standpoint.

In fiction writing, the position from which anything is considered in any particular scene should be the character through whose head we are viewing events.  In other words, a fiction writer should tell the story from only one character’s perspective, or two characters, but then separate each character’s point of view by page breaks or chapters.  There should be no head-hopping because that can lose readers.

Most books have been written well, without head-hopping, but many have used and many continue to use what is now deemed “shallow POV” and it is considered “telling” rather than “showing” and sounds as though there is a narrator telling the story to the reader.

Example:  He realized he was quickly running out of time to find a date for the prom.

Currently, in the fiction writing world, there is a push to do even better; to write in Deep POV; to get rid of the narrator.  This is done by really knowing your POVC, (Point of View Character); knowing him or her well enough that you are completely in their head and can only write things as that POVC sees and experiences them.  Taking the same example I used above for “shallow POV”, here it is rewritten in “Deep POV”:

Wow!  Where did the time go?  If he wanted to attend the prom, he’d better ask one of the girls today.

This may not be the best example, as I am just learning this “Deep POV” stuff myself.  I shared a portion of my WIP (work in progress) in a critique group a couple of weeks ago, and it was suggested to me that I study Deep POV and do my best to use it because it really makes your writing better.  It allows your readers to connect with your characters on a deep level which will draw the reader deeper into the story and keep them reading.

A short ebook was suggested to me, and it was mentioned that it was rather inexpensive at Amazon.  So, I looked it up and purchased it and am currently reading it, studying it and trying to put it into practice.  I have to admit that it will require me to reprogram my thinking in my writing, and I am finding it challenging.  The ebook that I am reading is called “Rivet Your Readers with Deep Point of View” by Jill Elizabeth Nelson.  I think the book is well written and she gives great examples that appear so easy, until I have to try to do them myself.  Although, after doing her worksheet to try to change some “shallow POV” sentences into “Deep POV” sentences, which I found difficult, I, then, went to a scene in my WIP and tried to apply the concepts and change that scene from “shallow POV” to “Deep POV”, and I found that much easier than the sentences on the worksheet in the ebook.  I believe that is because I know my characters so well.

To give you a better idea of what I’m talking about, I would like to share two of the examples that Jill Elizabeth Nelson shares in the book:

Shallow:  Pulling her coat tight against a frigid blast of wind, she thought she would never complain about the desert sun again.

Deep:  A frigid blast of wind iced her skin, and she pulled her coat tight around her.  She’d never complain about the desert sun again.

Shallow:  Thoughts of cake and candy tormented her.

Deep:  No sweets. No way. No how.  She wouldn’t give in to temptation.  “Yeah, right!”  Who was she fooling?

Can you see in these examples, how the shallow sound like they are being told by a narrator, and the deep sound like they are directly from inside the character’s head — no narrator?

So, what about you?  Do you use Deep POV?  Have you found it easy or difficult to utilize?

Quick Note

Hello Everyone.

I don’t have much time today, but I wanted to be sure to post something to try to keep to my three times a week.  This week will be extremely busy for me as we will be ending our homeschool co-op for the year (officially next Wednesday, but this Wednesday may be the last day for my boys and me).  Then on Saturday, March 28th, I will be attending a one-day writing workshop and I need to prepare 500-1000 words of something I have written or am writing to share in a group.

In addition to all of that, my husband will be going into the hospital for hip replacement surgery next week, so I will be between home and the hospital for three or four days until he comes home.

So, as you can see, I will be a busy lady for a while, but I will do my best to post here, although I might miss a day or two next week.

I hope all of you are doing well, and for those of you who write, I hope your current WIP is going well.

Writing Resources and Groups

Well, this has been an exciting week, and I know I am posting this a day late, but, hey, at least I’m posting.  I’m sorry there was no post on Wednesday.  That’s a harder one to make happen, but I’m not giving up.  I’ll keep working on it.

Anyway, this week I joined American Christian Fiction Writers.  I am so excited!  They have so much to offer, and I just found out a few days ago that they now have a PA state chapter and I know the Area Coordinator, so I joined that as well!  This gives me many great writing resources, including writing classes for no additional fee, and connections to even more writers than I have already connected with through LCW.  They have lots of wonderful online resources including a critique group, and now with a State Chapter, access to others via Skype as well.  I’m so excited to be a part of this great organization!

In addition to that, I ordered some wonderful writing resources online, and they arrived on Tuesday.  I now own  The Emotion Thesaurus:  A Writer’s Guide to Character Expression by Angela Ackerman and Becca Puglisi.  I found out about this resource from my friend Donna on her blog Donna L. H. Smith.  I have already read the parts that are for reading and have looked at many of the thesaurus entries and believe this will be a valuable asset and tool to my writing.  The other six items I purchased are all by the same author, James Scott Bell, who is known as one of the best writing coaches.  He has written many great books on writing that have become bestsellers.  The ones I purchased are:  Write Your Novel From the Middle:  A New Approach for Plotters, Pantsers and Everyone in BetweenSuper Structure; The Key to Unleashing the Power of Story; How to Write Dazzling Dialogue:  The Fastest Way to Improve Any Manuscript; Conflict & Suspense; and Plot & Structure:  Techniques and exercises for crafting a plot that grips readers from start to finish.  I also purchased his book, How to Make a Living as a Writer, and this is the one I have begun to dig into.  It has a lot of great information and suggestions.  I have many parts already highlighted and several pages dog-eared, yes, I said, “Dog-eared”.  I NEVER dog-ear book pages, and it took me a very long time to even get comfortable highlighting and underlining parts in books because I was taught that books are something you treat with care and respect.  They are not to be written in and pages are not to be bent, folded, wrinkled or dog-eared — Use a Bookmark.

However, I read the following quote on the back of Write Your Novel from the Middle:  “I need three things before I tackle a new novel:  Diet Coke, a laptop, and my dog-eared copies of James Scott Bell’s books on writing craft!”  — Kami Garcia, #1 NY Times & International bestselling writer.  That quote seemed to strike a chord with me, and even though, I have never dog-eared pages before, in my life, I realized it was a great way to be able to find the information I considered, most important, quickly and easily.  So my James Scott Bell writing resources will be the first books I have dog-eared (although I did dog-ear just a couple of pages in The Emotion Thesaurus.

As I dig into these resources and put the lessons into practice, I will let you know what I think of them and whether or not I would suggest them to others.  I am already quite sure I would recommend How to Make a Living as a Writer by James Scott Bell, even though I am only three chapters finished — it’s that good!

How about you?  Do you have some resources that you think are extremely valuable, that you rely on?  I’d love to know what they are.  Please leave a comment and share.  It’s important that no matter how long and successfully we write, we need to continue to study our craft.

Taking Care of Me and Learning that Writing Requires Patience

This year I am trying to commit to doing things that I think are important for my own personal well-being.  Being a mother of two busy boys and one adult son who is preparing for college, and homeschooling makes life very busy.  Being a mother who has always put everyone’s needs before her own, it is difficult to consider my needs important enough to allow time to take care of me on a daily basis.

Last September, I had a wake up call that caused me to make, not only and effort, but a commitment to take care of me.  Last September, I had to wake my husband and have him take me to the emergency room because of severe pain in the middle of my chest that shot straight through to the center of my back and into my right shoulder.  I was frightened, worried that I might be having a heart attack.  After spending about eight hours in the E.R., I was relieved and thankful to find out it wasn’t my heart, but I was diagnosed with gall stones, and in order to avoid repeating this awful pain, I needed to change my eating habits.  (Also after a follow up appointment with a specialist, they made an appointment for me to see a surgeon to have my gall bladder removed.)  That never happened.  I found a naturopathic doctor instead, and what a blessing!  She has me on several whole food supplements and gave me a plan for eating healthy that would not aggravate my gall bladder, and it was the first healthy eating plan that I have found easy to follow and stick to, and I have been doing well since then.  So, pain motivated me to commit to taking care of myself physically, and now that the weather is getting warmer, my plan is to commit to walking my dog at least three times a week as well.

What about my other needs?  My need to feed my brain and my need to write.  My need to feed my brain is filled by having time to read, so I have committed to reading every night before bed.  This has been a blessing in three ways:  1) it feeds my brain with knowledge and entertainment; 2) it allows me to examine other writers’ works to see what is selling; 3) it relaxes me and helps me to sleep.  Finally, my need to write, and for me it is a need.  I find if I do not write, I get frustrated and short-tempered and feel like I could burst because I have story ideas and characters in my head that really need to get out.  I have been blessed by a supportive family in this endeavor, as well as the others listed above, in that they encourage me to write.  I have been a member of a local writers’ group for a little over a year now that meets monthly, and I rarely miss a meeting.  They also have a one-day writers’ conference in the Spring and I attended last year and am already registered for this year.  Any other one-day writers’ conferences or workshops that I find happening withing a reasonable driving distance, my family encourages me to attend, and I do.  I also committed to writing this blog, not quite a year ago, and this year I am doing my best to commit to posting three times a week, though I don’t always succeed.  I have recently committed to writing for two hours every evening and I have been blessed to be able to be faithful much more than not in this endeavor.  I am also committed to connecting with other writers/authors, both published and unpublished because it is an encouragement and inspiration to me to get to know them and to learn from them.

Finally, this morning, I made another commitment that I should have made a very long time ago, and that is I committed to starting each day, Monday through Saturday, in devotion with the Lord.  Sundays I won’t have time to do this as we will I will be busy helping everyone get ready to get out the door for Sunday school and church where I will meet with the Lord on His holy sabbath each week.  This is huge because this fills my most important need; my eternal need; my spiritual need.  The first devotion/Bible study book I have decided to go through in my morning times with the Lord is Write His Answer by Marlene Bagnull because not only will this provide nourishment for my spiritual need, but will help me and encourage me in my writing, something I believe God has given me to do.

This morning I learned that “Writing requires patience”:  patience in doing the writing, patience in editing the writing, patience in receiving feedback on the writing, patience in waiting to hear back from the magazine or publisher or whomever I submit my work to, and patience to keep trying when my writing is rejected over and over and over again, all the while trusting in the Lord.  The two verses that the Lord impressed upon me this morning are:

“In his heart a man plans his course, but the Lord determines his steps.”  (Proverbs 16:9)

“Being confident of this, that he who began a good work in you will carry it on to completion until the day of Jesus Christ.”

(Philippians 1:6)

These verses tell me that I need to seek God’s plan for my writing and set specific and measurable goals and to give myself and my writing time to develop.

How about you?  Are you taking care of yourself?  Have you learned to seek God’s plan for your writing and have you learned to be patient — to give yourself and your writing time to develop?

A Heart’s Disguise by Colleen Coble

A Heart's Disguise

I received this book free from the publisher through the BookLook Bloggers book review bloggers program.  To find out how you can become a book reviewer, click here.

USA Today bestselling author Colleen Coble has written several romantic suspense novels including Tidewater Inn, Rosemary Cottage, and the Mercy Falls, Lonestar, and Rock Harbor series. Visit her website at http://www.colleencoble.com Twitter: @colleencoble Facebook: colleencoblebooks

A Heart’s Disguise by Colleen Coble is the first book in the “Journey of the Heart” series.  It takes place in the tiny town of Wabash, Indiana just after the Civil War.  Sarah Montgomery harbors a deep sadness in her heart because the man she loves with every ounce of her being, Rand Campbell, has not returned from the battle front.

With her father’s health failing, he and her brother encourage Sarah to marry Ben Croftner so that she will be settled before her father’s death.  However, when she finds out that Rand is still alive and that Ben knew it, she breaks off the engagement.

Ben doesn’t take the rejection lightly, and he plans to abduct Sarah.  Then Rand comes to her aid, but informs her that he is leaving, as he is still in the Cavalry and has been posted at Fort Laramie, Wyoming.  He asks Sarah to go with him as his wife.

What will Sarah do?  Will she be able to leave her dying father’s side to travel west with the man she has always loved?

This book grabbed my emotions from the first page.  My emotions ranged from sympathy, to anger, to pain and hurt.  The characters in the story grabbed my heart and I cheered them on throughout, except for Ben Croftner who simply made me angry, and I wanted someone to teach him a lesson.  Of course, Sarah’s brother, William, isn’t very likeable either.

The story was romantic and sad.  It is an easy read at just 90 pages, and it left me wanting more.  I cannot wait for the second book in the series.  This is the first book I have ever read by Colleen Coble, but it won’t be the last.  I will anxiously await A Heart’s Obsession, and I’m sure I’ll look for other books she has written as well.

If you love a good romance story with a bit of danger, you’ll enjoy Colleen Coble’s Journey of the Heart.

Discipline and Determination

Okay, so I have shared, in the past, that I struggle with finding/making time to write.  Well, on Saturday, February 21, 2015, I attended my Writers’ Group meeting.  I was to give the devotion that day, and I shared a devotion entitled “First Things First” from the book Write His Answer:  A Bible Study for Christian Writers by Marlene Bagnull that focused on Matthew 6:33  “Give Him first place in your life and live as he wants you to.”  I also mentioned, before sharing the devotion that it is often a struggle for me to find/make time to write.  The devotion ends with this Bible verse:  “But they that wait upon the Lord shall renew their strength.  They shall mount up with wings like eagles; they shall run and not be weary; they shall walk and not faint.”  (Isaiah 40:31), followed by this poem:

Pressures

Father, I have so much to do

and not enough hours in the day to do it,

I know that’s only partly true.

I do have enough time

to do the things you want me to do.

But, Lord, how do I sort out what they are,

when everything screams for my attention?

I’m exhausted from rushing —

uptight and irritable.

Please forgive me and help me.

Help me to learn from your Son.

People were constantly pressing in on him.

He could have been consumed–burned out.

But Jesus took time to be alone with you.

He made you his top priority.

I must learn to do the same,

especially when I’m feeling pressured.

Help me to be still and know

that you are God.

Even as you created and hold together the universe,

you can bring order to my life if  I will let you.

Thank you, Lord.

I always make time to spend time in prayer with the Lord each day, but, I will confess, I haven’t made much time to read His word each day.  That is something I want to begin to make time for and I plan to.  My plan was to begin doing so this week, but so many unexpected things have happened this week, it got pushed by the wayside, again.  I need to learn to make it happen even if unexpected things happen.

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What does this have to do with writing?  Well, just like making time to read God’s word requires discipline and determination, so does making time to write.

Our guest speaker, at that February 21, 2015 meeting, mentioned during his speaking, that it is good for writers to have busy lives because it gives us a full life which gives us lots of ideas and information to use in our writing.  However, he also mentioned that he writes for two hours a day, sometimes longer on weekends, even in his busy life.

All of this resonated with me and made me think, and I thought, “If he can do it, I can do it.”  So I determined to set aside two hours a day to write.  I talked to my family about it, and they were encouraging.  So, Sunday, March 1, (no, I didn’t begin doing this right after the meeting), I finally found my determination.  We came home from church earlier than we normally do because it was snowing, and everyone wanted to do their own relaxing activities, so I decided to write.

I grabbed my laptop and went to the dining room table, and that’s when determination kicked in.  You see, I’m horribly guilty of procrastinating at beginning to write because I get onto social media first thinking I’ll write after spending some time on social media.  However, the social media time goes to long and the writing never begins.  So that Sunday, I determined NOT to look at social media, but to IMMEDIATELY begin writing.  I spent three hours, that day, writing.  That was last Sunday.

Today is Thursday, and I have managed to set aside 7 to 9 p.m. every evening to write, and though I haven’t written for the full two hours every night, I have written 1,000 words each night, with the exception of one, on which I wrote 800 words.  Now I look forward everyday to my writing time, and I believe, now that I have made it part of my routine, I will be able to stick with it.

How about you?  How do you make time for writing?

Author and Blogger, Jody Hedlund

Today I would like to introduce you to one of my favorite authors, Jody Hedlund!

Jody Hedlund. Web - Copy

I found Jody’s blog a little less than a year ago, when I was looking for good writers’ resources online.  I have been reading her blog faithfully ever since.  She posts on her blog every Tuesday and always has great writing tips and advice to share.  I began reading her blog before I ever read any of her books.

I was blessed, about two months ago, when a friend handed me one of Jody’s books and said I could read it.  She said that she had read on my blog that I hadn’t read any of Jody’s books yet.  I devoured that book, which is pictured down a little way in this post, Love Unexpected.  I became hooked and recently picked up a copy of The Doctor’s Lady which I look forward to reading soon.  I hope to read all of Jody’s books eventually.

I have found that, though, Jody is a very busy lady:  homeschooling her children, writing, traveling to research her writing, and I’m sure the list has more on it, she cares about her readers and other writers and really wants to be available to them.  She has contact information on her website and on her blog, and she will email you, if you email her.  I have emailed her twice to ask questions and she has been kind enough to respond with information that was very helpful to me.

 

An Uncertain Choice

It is also my pleasure to introduce you to Jody’s newest book — her first YA book! (Pictured above).  It is a story set in medieval times.  She is currently hosting a give away on her blog, where she will be giving a signed copy away!

The following is the description of the book on Amazon:

Due to her parents’ promise at her birth, Lady Rosemarie has been prepared to become a nun on the day she turns eighteen. Then, a month before her birthday, a friend of her father’s enters the kingdom and proclaims her parents’ will left a second choice–if Rosemarie can marry before the eve of her eighteenth year, she will be exempt from the ancient vow.

Before long, Rosemarie is presented with the three most handsome and brave knights in the land. But when the competition for her heart seemingly results in a knight playing foul, she begins to wonder if the convent is the best place after all. If only one of the knights–the one who appears the most guilty–had not already captured her heart.

I am not a YA reader, but I think I would still like to read this book!  I’m also certain that this would be a wonderful story for you to suggest or give to a young adult lady in your life.

 

Jody also has one historical book published.  It is:

Luther-Katharina

It is a story about Katharina escaping from a cloister and finding refuge with Martin Luther.  She seeks his help, but a war is about to break out and Martin Luther doesn’t think he has much time.  It is one of the greatest love stories in history.

 

Jody has written three historical romance series so far.

Love Unexpected

Love Unexpected is the first book in the Beacons of Hope series, but this book was preceded by an enovella that introduced the series, which I also read.  It is Out of the Storm, which is currently available for free here.

Her other series include:  The Michigan Brides collection and The Hearts of Faith series (The Doctor’s Lady is the second book in this series).

Her stories have well developed characters.  The women in her stories are strong, though they may not know it.  Her stories are romantic and inspirational and you may even learn some history you are not aware of as you read her books.  I have found her books hard to put down, and in Love Unexpected, I grew to love Emma and Patrick so much that it was sad to reach the end of the story and have to say goodbye to them.  I wrote a book review on this book here.

If you’re not familiar with Jody and her books, I encourage you to click one of the links in this post and find our more about her or download her free novella and introduce yourself to her writing.  If you are a writer who is still working toward becoming published or just want to learn more about writing, I encourage you to join me in reading her blog.

A Thousand Sleepless Nights by Michael King

A Thousand Sleepless Nights

A Thousand Sleepless Nights by Michael King is a wonderful story.  It is about a family that is broken.  It is about a woman’s struggle with cancer.  It is about what happens to the woman, the man who loves her and her children as she faces a very aggressive cancer.

This story is so realistic, and it’s a wonderful story because the characters and the issues they are dealing with could happen to anyone.  Therefore, the reader becomes captivated from the very beginning.  The story made me laugh and made me cry, and I always say those are the best stories.  They are the stories I always remember the most about.

The book was well-written.  The characters were rich and believable and I began to care about them from the beginning.  Not only did I begin to care about the characters from the beginning, but I could feel the hurt and pain that each of them was dealing with.  I could relate to these characters, not to the woman with cancer, as I have not had to face that, but some of the issues her children were dealing with were definitely things I could relate to, things I had dealt with in my life, either directly or indirectly.  The dialogue was believable and realistic.  Mr. King did a great job describing the setting and the scenes just enough to give me the information I needed, to feel as though I were there, but not too much as to make the story feel bogged down.

In my opinion, this book has something for everyone.  To watch how the characters dealt with the issues they faced was inspiring and thought-provoking.  I think I would re-read this book if I ever faced cancer.  I recommend this book to anyone who has faced, is facing, or knows someone who has faced or is facing cancer.  I recommend this book to anyone who enjoys reading realistic stories with believable characters and resolution.